Need a reader.

[Blue Ghost]

I'm almost done writing an adventure, but would like some feedback on it. Any takers?

 

[Grim Nefari]

I'll take a stab at it..

 

[FreeTrav]

I'll be happy to look at it - and if you're planning on releasing it for free, I'll also be happy to host it at Freelance Traveller once you've digested any feedback and decided it's ready to go public. editor@freelancetraveller.com

 

[Spinward Scout]

If you need another person, I'm in.

 

[Madarin Dude]

I would be happy to take a look at it.

 

[Blue Ghost]

Thanks.

Email me at Blueghos - AT - pacbell -dot- net

I'll send you a copy. It's very rough, it's got a lot of inconsistencies in some of the backstory, and I need to finish off ACT III. The only real details missing are various systems that I need to generate.

The only thing I ask is that you be as candid and critical of any and all aspects of what I've written so I can clean it up and make it better. Thanks much.

 

[Blue Ghost]

I want to thank the people who gave me some constructive feedback. I think I have a better handle on differentiating flavor from plot points.

I just need to write the final chapter for this thing, then send it off.

Roger, if you're reading this, I'm still conjuring part two.