The fourth iteration of the draft is posted. It has slipped out of Phase I and moved into Phase II.
Looks very very good.
I don't know about traveling via low berth to Fornol, but that's just a quibble and doesn't really matter. When I used the term "deadhead" I was referring to air/rail carriers' practice of carrying employees who aren't working on scheduled trips to locations where they would start working.
I've stolen two other scenario ideas from various sources: Blackmail and Prison Break.
Admittedly, the blackmail idea is a trope. It's still good if handled correctly. Windhoek is with the players and the group meets with a business contact. At the meeting, the business pretense is quickly dropped and the players are given "an offer they can't refuse". The blackmailer doesn't reveal who Windhoek is, but does state that Windhoek is wanted - legally or illegally - by powerful people. Thanks to their association with him, the players are now wanted too. The blackmailer will report, capture, and/or hold them all unless the players do something.
The prison break idea is stolen from
Flaming Eye and
Knightfall among others. The players stumble into an active war zone; Corridor, Lishun, Gushemege, etc. Their ship is impounded and they're tossed in a camp for detainees. While the forces who captured them aren't in much of a hurry to ID people and release those deemed safe, they're eventually going to do it. While in the camp the players meet Windhoek. His current disguise won't hold up under any scrutiny, so he is very interested in escaping and the players join his escape plot. He should actively recruit the players because of their skills, the fact they're new, and/or the fact their ship is still nearby.
An recurring NPC could be an Inspector Javert (Les Misérables)/Lt. Gerard (The Fugitive) type who is trailing Windhoek and shows up occasionally disrupting the players' plans. Javert/Gerard shouldn't be able to arrest or detain Windhoek out of hand because that would end things quickly. There may be jurisdiction issues or Javert/Gerard may have no official standing. Rather than being an overt agent of some faction, he would be either a "concerned citizen" with great connections or a covert agent who can't reveal himself lest he be arrested/detained too.