2320AD Errors, Layout Issues, Etc...

[hunter]

If you spot any problems in the PDF and would like to help, please post the issue to this topic and let me know the page number, column, and roughly what paragraph the problem can be found, then a brief description of the problem and how you think it needs to be fixed.

Layout issues, typos, etc., I can fix pretty quick. Problem with the actual content, we'll have to see what Colin's take on it is.

I'll go through once a week and compile any new issues, fix them up and post an updated version of the file which everyone will be able to download from their eLibrary account.

Thanks for your help in advance!

 

[joi_sourcebook]

Hunter,

It would be worth adding some text to either the adverts or the pdf - probably both - to indicate that the document is due to be updated free of charge with Ted's version which will include reformatting and new illlustrations. People who haven't been paying close attention to these boards might otherwise think that the current version is the final one.

Fantastic effort looking forward to all the pretty pictures.

Jonathan

 

[yatima]

Page 125, column 2, first paragraph under Aurore/Eta Bootis.

The second sentence seems to end with an unfinished thought:

"Though ravaged by the war, it recovered sooner than many other worlds, and it is the base."

Base of what? Was material omitted here?

 

[yatima]

Page 129, Map of Freiland seems to have a stray 'Farming' icon in empty space.

 

[Colin]

Originally posted by Yatima:
Page 125, column 2, first paragraph under Aurore/Eta Bootis.

The second sentence seems to end with an unfinished thought:

"Though ravaged by the war, it recovered sooner than many other worlds, and it is the base."

Base of what? Was material omitted here?

Looks like it. should read "...and is the base of operations for most Human space forces operating in Kafer Space."

I noriced a disturbing number of typos in the Aurore entry as well. My bad, I guess.

 

[hunter]

Originally posted by Colin:
I noriced a disturbing number of typos in the Aurore entry as well. My bad, I guess.

Ah the beauty of PDFs Shoot me any changes and I'll get em posted and updated.


Hunter

 

[Nearside]

Eeep. Just after I got mine printed.
D'oh.

Will you update people that bought from COTI, so we can download the newer version?

 

[hunter]

Yup. Everyone who buys this one will be able to upgrade to any updates. In the case of purchases from here, you'll just need to log into your eLibrary account and download the file again.

Hunter

 

[AzSteven]

Originally posted by Colin:
Looks like it. should read "...and is the base of operations for most Human space forces operating in Kafer Space."

I noriced a disturbing number of typos in the Aurore entry as well. My bad, I guess. [/QB]

Well sure - based on your avatar I am not surprised; I really cannot see a Kafer being very successful with a QWERTY keyboard...

 

[yatima]

Read through Chapters 1 and 2, (really enjoyed reading the background, Colin) found a few very minor issues:
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• Page 4, Column 1, second paragraph: comma after 2320 is bold.</font>
• Page 5, Column 1, second sentence under Stutterwarp: "Stutterwarp become ineffective..." should this be "Stutterwarp becomes ineffective..."?</font>
• Page 9, Column 2, Gene protests: "the new citizens of Kings" should this be "the new citizens of King"?</font>
• Page 10, Column 1, The Decline of nationalism: "The proper national citizenship...", should this be "Proper national citizenship..." or perhaps "A proper national citizenship..."</font>

 

[yatima]

Found a few more minor issues in Character Generation:

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• Page 19, Column 2, last paragraph, second sentence: "...their lives up that point" should this be "...their lives up to that point"?</font>
• Page 29, Column 2, Using Prior History in character Generation, Page reference 'the mustering out table provided in 2320AD on page 00' should this be 'the mustering out table provided in 2320AD on page 20'.</font>
• Page 34, Column 1, Starting Skills and Feats, second paragraph: "...receives a extra feat..." should this be "...receives an extra feat..."?</font>

 

[estar]

Continuity problem

Hermes page 87-88 is mostly ice. Neither the map or description reflect that.

from the original.

Mu Herculis-Hermes: The Mu Herculis star system is a trinay grouping of two M4 V
stars and a G5 IV star, Mu Herculis A. Circling Mu Herculis A are six planets, of which Hermes
is the third. Hermes has a diameter of nearly 10,000 kilometers and a surface gravity of 0.73
G. Its surface is 80 percent water, all of it ice except for a narrow equatorial band. America
and Australia cooperated in a joint colonial venture here, aided by funding from the Alberta
Farmer’s Cooperative. Initial plans were to make this an agrarian colony, but, when that failed,
a private group used the world as the site of the Mule Corporation, a maker of heavy machinery

 

[Colin]

I'll look into that when I get back to my computer.

 

[jwcarroll60]

I have a different issue. I have tried to donwload this 4 times. Each time it comes up as a corrupted or invalid file.

I really could use some help here from somone. I would like to enjoy the product I have purchased.

 

[hunter]

Originally posted by jwcarroll60:
I have a different issue. I have tried to donwload this 4 times. Each time it comes up as a corrupted or invalid file.

I really could use some help here from somone. I would like to enjoy the product I have purchased.

From here or RPGNow or DTRPG?

 

[LordVan]

Could we get rid of the annoying starscape/black bars on the side of the pages? It makes it a royal pain in the @$$ to print and eats up ink and toner from printers.

 

[TWILIGHT]

..Or use them as 'good old sidebars'tm???

 

[waltzacherl]

Colin,

If you care to hear technological issues, hear are a couple that I have noted.

Thermal Optics - They should not be able to see through solid matterial. The thermal band is between 5-14 microns which corresponds to most vibrational and rotational energy levels. Most matterials are not transmissive at these wavelengths. Some exceptions are silicon, germanium, and saphire. Even a normal window is opaque to thermal radiation.

Free Electron Laser in the point defense setion - FELs are generally very large and heavy (10s of tons), and they require a source of high energy electrons. They produce x-ray radiation that is not capable of being steered by normal mirrors. (There are x-ray "mirrors" that rely on grazing incidence to diffract the x-rays, but they can only steer the beam by a fixed and limited amount.) If you were just looking for something "techy" sounding, you could say a "Q-switched, regeneratively amplified, femtosecond pulse laser."

Walt

 

[TWILIGHT]

A plate of greasy anti-balsams anyone?
(just kidding)

 

[yatima]

A few more minor typos from my read-through:

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• Page 37, Columns 1 & 2, Signature: There seems to be a lot of repetition in the first couple of paragraphs of some variant of the sentence "A vehicle’s base signature is used as a modifier for spotting it, either visually or by electronic means." making this section a little confusing to read.</font>
• Page 42, column 2, Scope of operations: "...and it there that the Foundation's policies..." should this be "...and it is there that the Foundation's policies..."</font>
• Page 43, column 1, Scope of operations, paragraph 2: "...since the end of Kafer War..." should this be "...since the end of the Kafer War..."</font>
• Page 43, column 2, "Rebco located their new organization’s offices to Wellon..." should this be "Rebco located their new organization’s offices on Wellon..." or perhaps "Rebco relocated their new organization’s offices to Wellon..."</font>
• Page 43, column 2, inconsistent capitalization "RebCo even provides..." should this be "Rebco even provides..."</font>
• Page 44, column 1, Mission statement: "...focused on convenient foods..." should this be "...focused on convenience foods..."</font>